What Mike Trout’s Injury Means for the Angels

[MLBN_Hakim]

Hey I'm new here. I write for MLB Nation and I guessed you wanted to read this Angels article:

 

http://www.themlbnation.com/2013/08/22/mike-trout/

 

Please tell me what you think, Thanks.

[SoWhat]

I dont get it, the article has nothing to do with the title.

[halobob]

Wow

[Ohtaniland]

Albert Pujols is the face of the franchise, just ask him.

[mtangelsfan]

So your article is saying the Angels aren't going to make the postseason this year without Trout?

 

They weren't going to make the postseason with Trout.  I don't really get your point.

[AngelArcher]

You could've chosen to write about how Trout's injury may help the Angels chances of signing him long term this winter, instead you write about????

[tdawg87]

So your article is saying the Angels aren't going to make the postseason this year without Trout?

 

They weren't going to make the postseason with Trout.  I don't really get your point.

 

He said "with or without Trout".

 

Apparently I'm reading a completely different article because I don't see anything wrong with it, other than it being really short.

[mtangelsfan]

So what does the title of the article have to do with the article?

 

I'm not trying to be douche here.  The article is basically what has been written 1000 times on this forum this season, with better english and punctuation.

[Halos of Anaheim]

I'm literally dumbfounded (dead serious). As the page was loading I was expecting some kind of overreaction about Trout's tight hammy, then when you acknowledged it wasn't serious I was confused on what the article would end up being about. As I kept reading...I'm still confused. The Angels won't make the playoffs with or without him, but they weren't going to make the playoffs with him anyways, even though he's only missed 3 games..so what was the point of this article?

[NrM]

I'm literally dumbfounded (dead serious). As the page was loading I was expecting some kind of overreaction about Trout's tight hammy, then when you acknowledged it wasn't serious I was confused on what the article would end up being about. As I kept reading...I'm still confused. The Angels won't make the playoffs with or without him, but they weren't going to make the playoffs with him anyways, even though he's only missed 3 games..what?

lol yea.. the people who are going to read this article already know the angels aren't making the playoffs...

[The Dude]

Damn guys, ease up a little it wasn't that bad.

 

Thanks for sharing your work. Perhaps next time you could add a little more content.

[Sully151]

Wait, the Angels aren't making the playoffs?

Next thing you are going to tell me is that the Dodgers are.

[Mark68]

So...what exactly DOES Trout's injury mean for the the Angels?

 

Besides bad grammar, that is...

[LightTheHalo]

Offering constructive criticism here ... that was not good. 

 

If the point of your column was to say "Trout is good, the Angels are not," then you more of less got it across, but that's really not a strong idea around which to craft a column.

 

Keep writing and keep reading the pros to learn a bit about how to go about it.

[yk9001]

If you are in the ninth grade or lower, this isn't bad work.

 

This sentence is crying for some structure:

While this is not a serious injury, when looking at how the team has been performing compared to Trout as an individual.

[Tank]

Hey I'm new here. I write for MLB Nation and I guessed you wanted to read this Angels article:

 

http://www.themlbnation.com/2013/08/22/mike-trout/

 

Please tell me what you think, Thanks.

this was your third sentence, and it ended your opening paragraph: "While this is not a serious injury, when looking at how the team has been performing compared to Trout as an individual."

 

when i read fragmented sentences this early on in an article, that's the point at which i stop reading. clean it up or you'll never get me to read another article.

[yk9001]

These two sentences are a mess.

 

The Fish Man is batting .333 with 78 RBI’s and 21 Home Runs. Comparing him to Josh Hamilton who was supposed to be a stud this season, he’s hitting for .228 with 60 RBI’s and 19 bombs.

 

My 10th grade English teacher, Mrs. Martin, was a flat-out drunk.  And she taught future tweeker Hagerstonians better English than this.

[yk9001]

What on earth is MLB Nation?

 

edit: I went to another story on this site.

 

These are the first two sentences I read:

 

The problems of Johnson have caused the orioles some troubles. From blown saves to losing games Jim Johnson has been consisten but not in a good way.

 

 

 

I am guessing this site is run by terrorists, and they are planning to take down America, one grammatically challenged sentence at a time.

[Hollyw00d]

It's like red sox nation, except less annoying and douchey

[yk9001]

MLB Nation is comedy gold, Jerry!

 

The problems of Johnson have caused the orioles some troubles. From blown saves to losing games Jim Johnson has been consisten but not in a good way.

The Orioles are struggling to win games and Johnson hasn’t helped any.

For example, lets say Chris Tillman finishes the eighth inning with the lead. Lets say it’s 4-3 Orioles are winning, Jim Johnson comes into the game throws his 8 warmup pitches and then the first batter comes to the plate. Jim Johnson comes into the game and the first batter gets a hit. So now Johnson is in the stretch with 0 outs. Johnson walks the next guy and the next guy so now it’s bases loaded with no outs. Which the other team takes advantage of this situation as a good team would do. And two runners score off of one hit. So the Orioles lose and Johnson gets the blown save and a loss, and Tillman with the no decision.

 

People always say that k-rod was going to be the next Mariano Rivera, but they were wrong. People were saying that Jim Johnson was going to be the next Mariano Rivera but they were wrong also. The trend of this is that once people say that you are the next Rivera then they do horrendous in the next season. Nobody will ever be like Mariano Rivera ever!

[Tank]

i saw english cop reading this article. here's what happened to him:

 

[Mark68]

MLB Nation is comedy gold, Jerry!

 

The problems of Johnson have caused the orioles some troubles. From blown saves to losing games Jim Johnson has been consisten but not in a good way.

The Orioles are struggling to win games and Johnson hasn’t helped any.

For example, lets say Chris Tillman finishes the eighth inning with the lead. Lets say it’s 4-3 Orioles are winning, Jim Johnson comes into the game throws his 8 warmup pitches and then the first batter comes to the plate. Jim Johnson comes into the game and the first batter gets a hit. So now Johnson is in the stretch with 0 outs. Johnson walks the next guy and the next guy so now it’s bases loaded with no outs. Which the other team takes advantage of this situation as a good team would do. And two runners score off of one hit. So the Orioles lose and Johnson gets the blown save and a loss, and Tillman with the no decision.

 

People always say that k-rod was going to be the next Mariano Rivera, but they were wrong. People were saying that Jim Johnson was going to be the next Mariano Rivera but they were wrong also. The trend of this is that once people say that you are the next Rivera then they do horrendous in the next season. Nobody will ever be like Mariano Rivera ever!

Does Jose Mota write for MLB Nation?

[Troutipoo27]

Mike trouts injury actually means he is human. Not some kind of crazy robot.

[afrochild]

As a former Journalism major, this article made me cringe.

[yk9001]

Mike trouts injury actually means he is human. Not some kind of crazy robot.

 

 

With writing like that, you may have a job at MLB Nation.